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Bolt From The Blue
Bolt From The Blue | Willow Thomas
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PuddleJumper
Bolt From The Blue | Willow Thomas
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I have the final version and it still reads like a first draft. I wonder what the other version was like because this one still has pacing issues, typos, weird dialogue, and it's awkward to read.

It's very safe. Fake dating the bi hockey player because your shitty friends are trying to force you to date someone. But twist! You both have crushes on each other.

PuddleJumper Everything is just fine. No fall out from the game dating even though they both like each other and no real miscommunication. The friends are so shitty even NPCs agree.

It's low stakes, low angst, hea.

3d
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