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Off Season | Clive Fleury

Ramesh Ryan is a high-flying Sydney detective until he loses a sure-fire front page news case against a drug king-pin and is asked to move to the Central Coast town of Barton for his health. Coincidentally a drug shipment is mishandled and bodies start turning up in droves just after Ryan arrives. Plus there's a 15 year old mystery tangled in. (set in 2021, published 2024)

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Off Season | Clive Fleury

so-so

ER from LT. Picked it because I have family in Oz and for the lead character‘s name, detective Ramesh Ryan. About 1/6 in. Decent writing, could use some editing (eg reverie not revelry, letter 4, blood wrenching cry) and polish - and fewer random exclamation marks! POV is 3rd person but can suddenly switch between people which disrupts the narrative flow.

rretzler Hi, there! Hope all is well with you and your family! 2mo

humouress @rretzler Hey you! Haven't seen you on LibraryThing for a while. We're all good, thanks. How about yourselves? 2mo

humouress 1/3 in. There's the odd gruesome bit (eg victim's face being smashed by propeller) which feels added in to try to make it more gritty. Either do gruesome all the way - which would be a different type of book - or (my personal preference) don't make it gory at all.
A character called F. has just been introduced. Not sure yet if it's their name (there are lots of weird 'gang-type' names) or a clumsy attempt to obscure their identity. 2mo

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humouress I'm appreciating the continuity between the end of one chapter and the beginning of the next. And the random exclamation marks seem to have disappeared but there are a few brand names scattered around. Sentences tend to be a bit short which chops up the flow.
Easy to put down but easy to pick up again. Good plotting.
Fair number of words used wrongly. No idea how accurate the portrayal of gangsters in Sydney is. (edited) 2mo

rretzler @humouress We‘re all doing well. I keep thinking I need to get back on LT one of these days but just thinking about all of the book info that I need (well, want) to input seems overwhelming! But I do miss all of the people! (edited) 2mo

humouress @rretzler You don't *have* to input a heap of info 😊(though that's one of the things I enjoy doing on LT) - just come back and chat. I find the phone app really quick for cataloguing a whole lot of books in one go, if that's one of the things you're avoiding 😉 2mo

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